Bass
The first melodic track the comes in, I can't tell if it's a bass or a really too loud guitar, but anyway it really overpowers the entire mix.
Just tone that down a little bit.
Loved one of the guitar tracks that made a humorous scuttling sound.
Crunchy, crunchy, crunchy.
Like the tone.
Ever tried putting a bass track in there?
AARRRGHHH!! I know dude! I'm having trouble finding a bass player right now =(
Like you said.
The vocals are iffy.
The intro really builds up the song nicely.
How are you recording your instruments? I'm getting some distortion over the whole track sometimes.
Otherwise good.
We recorded through a PA individually.
Thanks for the review!
Melody
The melody needs to vary a little bit to keep it more interesting. That's your only downfall.
At 1:10 you might to turn that guitar track down a bit. As I see it, it's supposed to be a little break from the heavy distortion, so it being a little quieter could help.
The new riff at 2:40 really made the song. Great job with that.
At 3:00ish where the strings come in, for a little while them seem to be a little late, it may just be me.
The melody will vary with a second guitar when my buddy has time to record it =) Other than that, thanks for the compliments, I really appreciate them!
Nice.
The drums were really militaristic in the beginning, which I like. You might want to mix up the rolls with another sample of the same hit to prevent the "machine gun" techno drum sound. Great guitar.
It's a matter of personal taste so I'll just throw it out there: maybe you could make the piano track a little less sparse so it's playing chords with the left hand a little more. Also, the piano could be a bit louder.
Yes! I totally agree with you about the drums. I am currently seeking out a professional drummer that can play this beat for me and rerecord it. And yes, my friend, the piano is personal taste. How zen of you to realize that =)
Buildup, climax.......
Then nothing in particular. As dissonant wrote, it really needs something powerful to release the tension. Either a heavily distorted guitar or a powerful arpeggiated synth.
Have you tried distorting those drums a bit? It could yield some interesting results.
Oh, and turn up those background synths a little bit (all other ones besides the one that sounds like strings, which is perfect at the volume it is) because the drums are loud.
WOW! I'm loving all the amazing insights today =) I can sum up my response to your reviews with this : The Static Rose is a song written about my dear grand mother who is currently in a coma. Her whole life she blocked out her depression and did not seek help. As a result, her life was lived in agony and despair. All of the drowned out instruments represent her drowned out innocence. Bye for now =)
Re-record bass track.
The drums are a little muddy and you might want to boost the vocals in the mix. Nice guitar riff and synth work though. Sometimes the bass was out of sync though so you might want to re-record it.
Good though.
Missing something.
In the first section, the odd clicking synth(?)(actually I don't know what the hell that is, haha) just sounds gimmicky. The transition to the heavily distorted guitar takes too long, the near silence didn't help build the tension (also it wasn't perfectly synced at one part). The part with the guitar could use something else in the background to help fill in the silence within the riff. Good idea but it's missing something.
Hey! Thank you very much for your review of my song. I appreciate the time you took to listen to and review it for me. Ok, here's my take. I LOVE that synth sound, man. I'm sorry you don't, but hey differences are what makes life so special. =) I also love the near silence because that took a lot of restraint on my end because I tend to really over complicate transitions. And yes, a much more talented guitarist than myself will be writing a solo in the distorted guitar part. Cool, eh? And finally, don't be so concerned about timing in music my friend, rigid composition makes the music seem artificial and forced. have a good one! I'd love to see your takes on all my other songs =)
Ok.
Everything's there, but some minor things really do need to be tweaked/re-recorded.
Not everything lined up perfectly: drums, vocals, and guitar didn't always sync up correctly. Minor mistakes in a few places on most of the tracks
The bass could be lower in the mix. Try overdriving it or distorting it a little bit to add texture.
I don't know if it's just me, but the drum track at 2:30 needs some work, it just doesn't fit.
The synth was a nice touch that added a bit of needed flavor.
Vocals were basically perfect though.
Decent cover.
Only real beef is with the bass, it just seems overpowering.
Clean up the guitar a bit, lots of minor mistakes (but not bad for a first attempt as stated).
Vocals are a lot better than I was expecting so keep it up.
Sound quality is a little iffy, but hey it works.
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